Monday, May 18, 2009

Feedback exp 2

The intention of publishing the feedback below is so that all students can benefit by understanding the strengths and weakness’ of a range of projects. Please take the time to review other students work with these comments in mind. If you have any questions or would like any further clarification don’t hesitate to ask me during the studio session.

Philip Adams
Key strength of the scheme: Generally well put together particularly the overall composition.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Only two quotes. An enormous amount of circulation space that doesn’t really contribute to the spatial experience.

Nissa Bettess
Key strength of the scheme: Size, colour and lighting evocative and well considered.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Idea of normality is fascinating. Not really clear how you are exploring this idea. What is your take on normal/ abnormal? Is what you are saying that architecture is made up of walls, floors and roofs?

Will Carthey
Key strength of the scheme: Idea of interconnectedness and its relationship to the quote is good.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Lack of exploration of your ideas. You don’t only need to express the idea you need to consider how you can make them significant. You should be asking yourself if your interpretation of the idea is interesting, rich, exciting and well put together and if this is appropriate to your idea.

Angus Chu
Key strength of the scheme: Generally carefully put together and well considered
Most significant weakness of the scheme: The materiality and lighting is very controlled but does not make your project sing. Try experimenting with lighting and materials so that they contribute to the space. Create highlights, darkness, mystery, uniformity.............whatever suits your idea.

Cherry Fan
Key strength of the scheme: A couple of your image captures are well done. Good manipulation of the datum. Ramp visually exciting.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Some scale problems. Some things don’t fit together well.

Leila Hargreaves
Key strength of the scheme: The central space with the stairway is very powerful.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: You really explored your textures which I appreciate however some spaces are over textured which detracts from the space.

Lin Huang
Key strength of the scheme: Strong image captures and some very interesting spaces and compositions
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Why can’t I get into the lighthouse? Do you really understand what you have written in sentence starting with: The meeting room..........?

Pamela Jia
Key strength of the scheme: The chain like composition of spaces is interesting.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Some of textures not saved properly. You have hallway type spaces that don’t go anywhere. You need to consider how elements, including materials, join together.

Lawrence Kim
Key strength of the scheme: The careful cut into wall which articulates the whole composition is well done. The internal space is compositionally quite good as is the ramp with flat panels.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: The objects and spaces within the ‘frame’ (cut out in wall) could have been visually stronger objects and stronger spaces too. You would need to add some detail and try not to apply too much texture. Window in yellow ‘look out’ space too high.

Peter Kim
Key strength of the scheme: The thought process behind your design and the internal space.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: You need to sometimes explore different ways of expressing the idea. The spatial experience of the meeting and outdoor space is not as interesting as the internal space. You could also explore lighting more.

Lisa Li
Key strength of the scheme: Spaces well considered and appropriately scaled.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: You have used a lot of texture which sometimes overwhelms the space.

Fiona Luo
Key strength of the scheme: Overall structure of sequencing, portals and composition.


Most significant weakness of the scheme: A lot of texture which doesn’t contribute to your ideas. Get rid of guns and tools in image captures please.

Bree Miller
Key strength of the scheme: Good interlocking spaces. Some of the image captures show the spaces off well.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Lack of detail and proof of understanding space and scale. How things join is sometimes clumsy. If a secondary space is to be contrasted with main space the size and proportions of the second space will need to be significantly different.

Sean Niu
Key strength of the scheme: Composition in wall great. Interesting experiences and spaces. Good image captures. Good control of colour and atmosphere.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Some scale and fit issues such as stairs that don’t join/ fit well.

Jenny Qu
Key strength of the scheme: Some spaces exceptional. Blue/ sky room is interesting as is wire cage for Alfred Nobel.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: A little over textured sometimes. Get rid of guns etc. in images. Ramps are dangerous. Is that intentional?

Edward Sarafian
Key strength of the scheme: Image captures strong. Materials well considered.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Need to think about the hierarchy of spaces and potential use. Currently much of your design seems like left over space.

Jono Tat
Key strength of the scheme: Internal space well done. Good mix of detail and well scaled space.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Outdoor space less successful. Feels more like circulation space rather than a place to stay. A little more detail would have helped. In general when doing such simple spaces everything needs to be just right. Be critical of surfaces that do or don’t align and materials consider material transitions.

Alison Ward
Key strength of the scheme: External space well done. The use of all the layers as a compositional structure works well as does the choice of colours.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Ramps not integral part of design. Most image captures are overall images and can never be experienced when walking around. Be careful how things meet. Hierarchy of space needs work. What are the important spaces or are they all of equal value?

Jamie Yoo
Key strength of the scheme: Textures well done.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Elements appear oversized. Overall image captures suggest the spaces will be more interesting than they are. Things sometimes don’t fit well together. You need more detail.

Ruben Zhao
Key strength of the scheme: Some amazing imposing space. One or two of image captures excellent.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Some spaces over textured. Looks a bit too much like a computer game. Consider resolving geometry of items that you copy several times in you spaces. Try and explore more with lighting and be careful how things join together.

33 comments:

  1. We could learn a lot from crayons. Some are sharp, some are pretty and some are dull, Some have weird names , and all are different colors, but they all have to live in the same box.............................................

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  3. may the blessing be always with you!!.................................................................                           

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  4. 字是活的,人和環境的觀察是活的,思想是活的。不管怎樣,就是要有一兩樣是活的。否則都是平庸。............................................................

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  7. 先將一個人的生活過好,才有能力過好兩個人的生活................................................

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