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The intention of publishing the feedback below is so that all students can benefit by understanding the strengths and weakness’ of a range of projects. Please take the time to review other students work with these comments in mind. If you have any questions or would like any further clarification don’t hesitate to ask me during the studio session.

Adams Philip
Key strength of the scheme: Good exploration of geometry underground and datum
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Clashing of objects and way things meet. First proposal which was very similar was more considered in this respect.

Bettess Nissa
Key strength of the scheme: Almost industrial aesthetic with integrated embossed like connecting pieces are fascinating.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: The careful siting of the scheme and manipulation of the datum could have really contributed to your design.

Carthey Will
Key strength of the scheme: Delightful complexity of upper space and ‘golden’ glow of space underground
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Resolution of underground space. Options to develop could have included colouring and shaping floor. Need to work on crafting sketches more carefully.

Chu Angus
Key strength of the scheme: Very consistent use of geometry both internally and externally.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Floor area enormous which means you should have considered the vertical dimension to create more spatial interest.

Fan Cherry
Key strength of the scheme: Internal spaces well done in particular ‘platform’ stair
Most significant weakness of the scheme: External appearance quite simplistic. This is only ok if composition considered very carefully.

Hargreaves Leila
Key strength of the scheme: Translation from sketch into 3d space is very well done. Underground space exciting.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Needs more resolution to convince that spaces really work.

Huang Lin
Key strength of the scheme: Great glass ball ‘landscape’ which also allows light into water under datum.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Three dimensional resolution of ‘aquarium’ under datum space.

Jia Pamela
Key strength of the scheme: Strange and interesting composition of iconic objects.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: No manipulation or evidence of considering datum.

Kim Lawrence
Key strength of the scheme: Spaces within spaces and the connections between the secondary spaces (boxes) make it spatially exciting.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: The datum appears to not have been considered in design.

Kim Peter
Key strength of the scheme: Excellent scale, resolution, coherency and detail of space above ground
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Difficult to get good idea of what is going on in underground space from images presented. Could have considered datum a little more.

Li Lisa
Key strength of the scheme: General spatial composition has interest.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: 95% of interesting underground work you did can not be experienced.

Luo Fiona
Key strength of the scheme: The beauty and simplicity of the scheme one week before submission
Most significant weakness of the scheme: The development of your scheme during the last week. Resolving the spaces doesn’t simply mean adding more shape. It can mean solving how things actually would be if constructed.

Miller Bree
Key strength of the scheme: Spaces and integration of stairs is very good. (A little more detail could have made it even better)
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Underground spaces not presented well in animations.

Niu Sean
Key strength of the scheme: Underground space looks exciting. Good interpretation of section.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: You used a lot of dark texture making it difficult to understand the spaces.

Qu Jenny
Key strength of the scheme: Top space strong, sculptural monumental space
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Need to move beyond simple extruding a main shape.

Sarafian Edward
Key strength of the scheme: Transformation of top section into 3D clear and well interpreted.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Underground spaces needed more work. Charles Moffat was not one of the clients.

Tat Jono
Key strength of the scheme: Scale and manipulation of ‘rolling’ floor, datum and sketches are good.
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Materiality (texture) and the way the roof sits on the scheme.

Ward Alison
Key strength of the scheme: Simple poetic above ground structure
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Try shading sketches with more care and think about transitions from inside to outside.

Yoo Jamie
Key strength of the scheme: Spatial experience of top space
Most significant weakness of the scheme: Scale of stair and the fact that spaces are the result of simply extruding a two dimensional shape.

Zhao Ruben
Key strength of the scheme: Clarity and monumentality of design
Most significant weakness of the scheme: The internal spaces are very basic with little detail or spatial interest.